Thinkwrite: This draft is for a special kind of sales pitch. Please think about what works to persuade you to part with your money. What turns you off? Discuss what makes an effective sales pitch for you.
Today is about giving feedback. YOU are the audience, so you need to
communicate
to each other what YOU find effective. Politely. Also, remember to focus
on the CAMPAIGN, not the idea. How can the presentation be more persuasive?
Note:
the blue comment sheets earn YOU points. Be detailed and
thoughtful.
ALSO, you may write ON the
draft you read with your reactions. This is a rough draft, so
DO NOT PROOFREAD or edit -- just provide reactions/ input/ ideas.
Useful
comments on a draft:
What colors? How much? When will I get it?
Why...? What does x mean? More info needed here...How does x work? I
want THIS reward! Don't you need money for x?
As you wait for a draft, or when you finish commenting on TWO drafts, (or if you did not bring a draft), please do Ex. 23.9 on page 272 in The
Everyday Writer. Put a number in each blank, and write the correct word
next to that number IN YOUR DAYBOOK. (There are 13 blanks.) Use the
"Glossary of Usage" starting on page 274 if you need help on the tough
ones.
Homework:
1. Use
today's feedback and get your paper ready for Thursday, when DRAFT 2 is due. Have
Draft 2 be as close to perfect as possible, so people can help with editing and
proofreading, as well as organization.
2. Finish Ex. 23.9 on page 272 of The Everyday Writer.
3. If you
want MY feedback, send me an email (kloden@southeast.edu) with your draft attached.
4. TWFTD: novice
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